Introduction to Example Paragraphs
Sentence 1: topic sentence (a fact + opinion = makes up the idea that you want to prove)
Sentence 2: main piece of evidence
Sentence 3: supporting evidence clarifying or bringing a subordinate point
Sentence 3 B: another piece of supporting evidence
Sentence 4: second piece of evidence
Sentence 5: supporting evidence
Sentence 5 B: another piece of supporting evidence
Sentence 6: Third piece of evidence
Sentence 7: supporting evidence
Sentence 7B: another piece of supporting evidence
Sentence 8: concluding statement
The Ways of Man: What to look for that might indicate an Unfaithful Spouse
- Any woman seeking to marry the human male animal should be under no delusion that to domesticate him into being a faithful spouse will be an easy task; for in many ways it is even worse than trying to tame and break the spirit of a wild horse.
- For those who try it, they should be careful not to trust what is before their own eyes, for a horse no longer kicking or bucking off its rider may be accurately perceived by the eyes to be tame, but a man is a Machiavellian liar, and his kisses and loving eyes and embraces always feign being faithful when faithful he is not.
- He will use any excuse he can to get away from you (an important document that he left at the office, a loaf bread that needs to be bought at the 7-11—no, he is not after 7 but the beautiful figure 8).
- With the wife pleased that he is taking an active domestic role of buying that loaf of bread, he has now been given liberty to cheat on her, and will do so by quickly picking up that other woman waiting in front of the convenience store for him—that woman whom he found on the internet looking for casual encounters.
- There he will drive with her to the love hotel for a thirty – minute ride on the mattress of a bed and return to kiss you and play with the baby.
- Man is a creature of pleasure, and no activity gives him the delusion of intimacy more than sexual contact.
- As relationships are always tortuous with intellectual and emotional affinity difficult to get right especially when women are such moody creatures and redoubled all the more during times of menstruation, a man yearns for the delusion of physical intimacy.
- He knows that it is not real, but when his wife is spending so much time with the child and is complaining that he is not providing her with ample money or seems more concerned with ways that she can spend more money to obtain home improvements, an escape into the intense physical yearning and pleasure becomes an insatiable quest.
- To dive into an enraptured state with bliss culminating until soon there is no more hunger allows him to feel complete intimacy that he knows is not real in lieu of incomplete and mutable mental and emotional intimacy with a wife that is mundane and real.
- Programmed to have casual sex with a multitude of women and increase population, man, for all his specious kisses to his wife, is never to be thought of as faithful to anything but delusions of intimacy.
The Materialistic Woman
- A materialistic woman who finds only pleasure on [in] luxurious products is very concerned about her image rather than intellectual and spiritual fulfillment.
- Wearing [Gucci or other] foreign haute-couture [brands of] clothes like Gucci and carrying Louis Vuitton’s [a] monogram[ed] clutch [-bag] she considers herself the most elegant person as [is always] reflected in her gold gilded mirror.
- The doll becomes thrilled and craves for new lux[urious] items every time they [are] first launch[ed] in[to the] market.
- As shopping is her main pastime[,] her maximum credit limits [have been reached, and she is overburdened in debt] are probably in heavy debt, but she does not care that much.
- Although she is broke, she [is a socialite with a steady group of admirers who] enjoys [the company of] her shallow life [presence as they] by sipping sparkling Champagne in combination with [and eat] Russian caviar at expensive clubs [filled with other socialites]. of socialites.
- She tries to mingle[s only with] herself with VIPs [of the] aristocratic class [,] and nouveau riches and gives them lavish [flattery] flatteries.
- Her top priority is hunting for rich and richer husband (s) no matter how old or pot – bellied they [may] look as she prepares a [to insert her] long-handled shovel [into the dirt in the hope of a] for gold rush.
- She does not [seek to obtain] acquire enough knowledge and culture due to [what she perceives as its] unexciting contents and she believes education does not [has no possibility of making] make her wealthy [in an expeditious manner—at least not] as quickly as finding rich men to marry.
- The materialistic woman does not care so much about world issues for she is the center of the world.
- The more this poor woman possesses, the more she wants because of her obsession [with wealth which is often referred to as ] in the roots of [all] evil – materialism.
The types of hardships and difficulties experienced by poor and oppressed individuals
- (topic sentence) With the majority of all financial enterprises firmly in the hands of the wealthy minority, the poor of the world languish in dire misery and dwindling hopes.
- (first piece of evidence) As wealthy enterprises have figured out how to cut expenses with fewer workers, often who are part-time and receive few benefits, lower overhead expenses as sometimes they do not sell from stores but like Amazon exist as warehouses, and the means to sell goods at more economical prices, they annihilate small businesses that do not have the financial wherewithal to compete and ruin the aspirations of the poor ever owning their own businesses and being able to raise themselves from poverty.
- (supporting evidence assisting sentence 2) Thus the poor are at best relegated to long hours of hard work with little pay or part-time work that is not enough from which to sustain themselves; and in both cases usually unable to acquire money to further their education or the education of their children, and even when the rare opportunity arises of being provided the means to acquire their education cheaply, not having the time to pursue it.
- (supporting evidence assisting sentence 2) Those with part-time work are too busy seeking out full – time employment and those with full-time employment do not have the ability to attend classes and are too exhausted to study.
- (Second piece of evidence) A third of the world’s population suffers from malnutrition, lives in squalid conditions cramped together with multiple families, and fears retirement.
- (supporting evidence assisting sentence 5) They often feel like leaves skidding around the earth’s surface in the winds of life’s vicissitudes.
- (supporting evidence assisting sentence 5) Sometimes their work is temporary; so when forced to go from place to place, they can find no stability whatsoever from which to establish and build upon their lives, or quitting jobs regularly in the hope of getting out of the cul-de-sac and dark alley from which they find themselves, they see little prospect for hope in the future, and old age has a decomposing stench in their imaginations.
- (third piece of evidence) Eating cheap fried chicken and skewered meat on the streets, living near polluted areas and sometimes toxic waste dumps, and experiencing working conditions that can impair their health, they are often bedeviled by health concerns which cause them to die at early ages.
- (Supporting evidence assisting sentence 8) The carcinogens of all three make their lives short indeed.
- (Concluding statement) When wealth is not divided providing opportunities for all, hope and longevity is murdered in senseless cruelty and selfishness.
The Ways of Children
Children are almost continually in a state of play and seem to demand that the world provide them with amusements continually; and although they are not always honest, they have an ability to care intensely about the suffering of other creatures. When they play, they attempt to act out roles in the adult world mixed with imagination and fantasy, but they do not realize that sharing and compromising are part of the real world; and so as they play together they become excessively possessive. This is particularly true with girls and their dolls. The young girls like showing off new dresses that they have put on their Barbie dolls, but will not allow their friends to touch their dolls even though they know that the dolls are not real babies. One other trait that children possess, and is visible as they play with each other, is that when one of their friends, or even a stranger, gets hurt they immediately care about the suffering child. And this trait is also extended to animals. Children usually want to assist a bird with a broken wing and will do so naturally unless they are exposed to too much violence. If a child is always scolded or beaten by his parents or is exposed to too much violence on the television and in video games, he then is not kind. Children are playful and caring creatures, but they are not skilled at compromising in their play and if treated with violence, will act violently